TEACHER FEEDBACK

There are a lot of very nice shots in your sequence so far, and the soundtrack certainly sounds appropriate to the context of a thriller, but it's not hanging together as a coherent sequence just yet. Obviously the sound needs finishing. The visuals seem to shift quite abruptly from the shots of the statues and sculptures to the stalker section. Do you have an establishing shot that will enable you to link these two parts together? Also, do you mean for the audience to be able to identify a link between the knife wielding man and the hanging man? At the moment it is very ambiguous. If this was your intention, you need to be able to explain this in terms of what narrative questions and enigmas are being raised by the ambiguity and confusion that exists in the sequence at present.